Demon-X
24th Nov 01, 2:03 PM
This is my fist piece of fiction, so be gentle:p
Im still workin on the first chapter so I'll leave you with the prologue.
p.s. sorry to those who read the post before when it was all caps ive had some probs with my comp but theyre sorted now
Crucian Sun
Prologue:
The sun fell over the ancient city of Tayana as
Hayita ran through the helix gardens, racing past glow lights as they burst into life with the setting of the sun, she was young for a scientist and her pale skin glistened in the twilight.
She seemed troubled, almost worried and the sun set upset her even more, light and dark were the centre of the Crucian religion they had no god’s, they worshiped only the sun and the three moons that orbited Cruxor. Hayita ran so hard it burned her lungs, but she had to keep on going she had to get to the great hall and inform the council of her discoveries.
Council was still in session and the chancellors and politicians were tired, important affairs of state that were still to be settled would have to wait, it was time for evening solice the daily worship of the sun.
The inner doors of the great hall flew open casting an uneasy shadow on the ancient stone table, this startled those members of the council who could still remember the terror that happened in this very room at the end of the first war, blood still stained the floor where so many died. Ardis looked up torn from his thoughts by this intrusion. ‘Chancellor Ardis, forgive me but I must tell you of the terrible discovery I have made’ Hayita gasped with exhaustion. Ardis was furious, how could such an insolent girl have anything important to say to the great council? ‘Guards remove this girl at once!’ he shouted.
‘Wait, please let me tell you’ tears filled the girls eyes,
Ardis turned away uninterested, and more concerned with the promise of his evening meal. ‘The Crux star is dying!’ Hayita screamed, desperate to be heard by the old politician.
Ardis turned round to face her, his deep black eyes burned with hidden anger. ‘what do you mean child’ he said
The guards stopped and Hayita continued ‘I have been monitoring the stars mass, it is consuming itself at a highly accelerated speed, if we don’t find a way to slow the process the sun will die within 200 years and destr….’ Hayita was cut short, ‘If our enemies learn of this they will destroy us!’ said Firel, he was young and inexperienced, he didn’t understand that the enemies of the Crux would simply have to wait until the sun went supernova and destroyed the Crucian Empire for them. ‘Shut up you fool’ Ardis shouted, clearly outraged at the further insolence of this girl and her wild theories. ‘The girl is lying, she knows nothing our star will continue to burn for millions of years, as will our empire Firel’ Ardis signalled the guards, they removed Hayita from the council screaming, she would be dealt with later. ‘There will be no more talk of this matter, the girl is mad, I will see you all at Solice this evening?’ the council members nodded and he left the great hall and retired to his quarters.
Im still workin on the first chapter so I'll leave you with the prologue.
p.s. sorry to those who read the post before when it was all caps ive had some probs with my comp but theyre sorted now
Crucian Sun
Prologue:
The sun fell over the ancient city of Tayana as
Hayita ran through the helix gardens, racing past glow lights as they burst into life with the setting of the sun, she was young for a scientist and her pale skin glistened in the twilight.
She seemed troubled, almost worried and the sun set upset her even more, light and dark were the centre of the Crucian religion they had no god’s, they worshiped only the sun and the three moons that orbited Cruxor. Hayita ran so hard it burned her lungs, but she had to keep on going she had to get to the great hall and inform the council of her discoveries.
Council was still in session and the chancellors and politicians were tired, important affairs of state that were still to be settled would have to wait, it was time for evening solice the daily worship of the sun.
The inner doors of the great hall flew open casting an uneasy shadow on the ancient stone table, this startled those members of the council who could still remember the terror that happened in this very room at the end of the first war, blood still stained the floor where so many died. Ardis looked up torn from his thoughts by this intrusion. ‘Chancellor Ardis, forgive me but I must tell you of the terrible discovery I have made’ Hayita gasped with exhaustion. Ardis was furious, how could such an insolent girl have anything important to say to the great council? ‘Guards remove this girl at once!’ he shouted.
‘Wait, please let me tell you’ tears filled the girls eyes,
Ardis turned away uninterested, and more concerned with the promise of his evening meal. ‘The Crux star is dying!’ Hayita screamed, desperate to be heard by the old politician.
Ardis turned round to face her, his deep black eyes burned with hidden anger. ‘what do you mean child’ he said
The guards stopped and Hayita continued ‘I have been monitoring the stars mass, it is consuming itself at a highly accelerated speed, if we don’t find a way to slow the process the sun will die within 200 years and destr….’ Hayita was cut short, ‘If our enemies learn of this they will destroy us!’ said Firel, he was young and inexperienced, he didn’t understand that the enemies of the Crux would simply have to wait until the sun went supernova and destroyed the Crucian Empire for them. ‘Shut up you fool’ Ardis shouted, clearly outraged at the further insolence of this girl and her wild theories. ‘The girl is lying, she knows nothing our star will continue to burn for millions of years, as will our empire Firel’ Ardis signalled the guards, they removed Hayita from the council screaming, she would be dealt with later. ‘There will be no more talk of this matter, the girl is mad, I will see you all at Solice this evening?’ the council members nodded and he left the great hall and retired to his quarters.