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    HW: Legacies Part IV

    AND SO IT BEGINS! THE FINAL PART TO THE LEGACIES SERIES!

    Had to use the Qwaar-voice for that one. And so! Chapters!

    Again, a reminder: For discussion of the entire series or Part III since I closed its thread, go to the HW Legacies Discussion Thread in the Fanfic section.


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    Chapter 1

    Gravity twisted as a powerful tunnel carved a long, narrow path between the damaged Godship Qwaar-Jet, and the Infected planet below. A split-second later, a narrow beam of light lanced from the tip of the massive superdreadnaught, and slammed into the surface of Haven. Explosions suddenly tore through the twisted ooze of Ashoran’s Beast as matter and antimatter annhilated in flashes of light.

    Every telepath in the region suddenly felt an inhuman howl of agony pierce their minds, screeching in hundreds of the Beast’s newly acquired voices. Noreena grinned evilly at how much pain and destruction she was giving Ashoran and the Qwaar-deesh for doing this to her home planet.

    Karan was helpless when Kharak was burned. I am not.

    The Qwaar-Jet’s main gun ticked the seconds of its firing time in a chilling countdown.

    Seven. Six.

    The super-megaship turned towards the God of War, its limbs extending outwards as the veins on it began to fade considerably after having expended so much biomatter. Its gravitic guns continued their assault on the massed Allied fleets surrounding it like so many flies. Gravitic bubbles sparked and engines exploded among the Allied fleets with disturbing regularity as commanders frantically plotted hyper-jumps away from the dying world. Glowing windows raced across ships all around the super T-MAT as more and more Allied fleets jumped out.

    A wave of boiling fury joined the screeching in Noreena’s mind, wrapping it in a familiar ice-cold darkness. It then began pummeling her memories with vicious abandon.

    CEASE THIS NOW, a deep voice boomed in her mind. OR I WILL CRUSH YOU AS I DID THE OTHERS. YOU ARE WEAKENED. YOU CANNOT CONTINUE THIS.

    Her enraged mind barely registered the psychic attack. She tossed it back with a laugh that could have chilled the blood of even the most fervent Qwaar-deesh soldier. She mentally reached out across the gap between the Qwaar-Jet and the darkness deep within the super T-MAT.

    Five. Four.

    She leaned into the Qwaar-Jet’s Cores for a full surge of their power, then formed a blazing psychic lance from that power. She then then plunged it into the heart of that darkness, which flailed violently with a gurgling scream. It expanded, then reformed itself around the lance. It then wrapped itself around the lance, then hurled itself across the mental distance towards Noreena’s own presence. She threw it back again, this time with an infuriated shockwave of blazing fire that roared through both minds like the spectacle below.

    Beneath the two ships, Haven burned in a dazzling whiteness as matter and antimatter extinguished one another in their violent collisions. Chunks of Infected debris hurtled at the ships above the planet as it began crumbling from the inside out in a chain of blazing explosions that swept across its surface. Several more pieces of the dying planet raced outwards, launched by the explosions behind them.

    The timer’s relentless march went on as second after second passed.

    Three. Two.

    The beam of light continued its deadly assault. Dazzling light tore through the twisted remains of what had been Haven’s crust, sending shockwave after shockwave rolling outwards as the beam burrowed deep into Haven’s dense core, detonating enormous amounts of molten rock with as much ease as it had torn through its crust and mantle. The planet promptly imploded on itself, sending outwards massive waves of tumbling molten debris that grew ever larger with each passing second. Gigantic shards of molten rock mixed with massive bubbles of lava as they spewed from the dying world below. One particularly large piece crashed savagely into the Qwaar-Jet’s bubble, causing its generators to drop from its once invincible green to the yellow.

    Noreena continued her blazing psychic assault on Ashoran’s mind, pummeling it with fire, light, and rage. She could no longer delineate her movements, but rather knew them as frenzied blurs of movement, flashes of light, and scorches of flame. A furious scream howled from the darkest recesses of her mind as memory after memory of her childhood and her relatives on Haven replayed themselves while she fought in their name.

    One. ZERO.

    The Godship’s main gun finally shut down, its dazzling beam silenced by the timer.

    In the blink of an eye, Haven imploded into a blindingly brilliant show of light and fire that sent out one final brutal shockwave that blinded even the Qwaar-Jet’s sensors. Light brighter than light poured into Noreena’s mind, overloading it within seconds. She screamed in her control bubble as every sensor feed turned into a white agony that tore into her mind with more force than any of Ashoran’s attacks. Pain tore savagely along her neural links as waves of crackling static replaced her feeds as sensor after sensor overloaded from so much energy being released. Some even exploded under the raw energetic strain.

    Another explosion rocked the Godship, this time from its rear. The Godship’s gravitic generators had been in the red the last several seconds. Now it had overloaded from the strain of both the battle, and fending off the massive soup of exotic particles, vaporized radiation, and flying debris that Haven had become. Fortunately the Godship’s chassis and hull kept the resulting explosion from completely gutting his engines.

    She vaguely felt her mechanical holding arms break as violently superheated plasma and massive chunks of Haven’s mantle and core smashed into the Qwaar-Jet’s heavily armored hull, sending the Godship tumbling into a spin not one crewmember would escape unscathed. She felt the large neural cable held to the back of her head strain against the connectors built into her skull from the sudden G-forces of the wild spin.

    It suddenly snapped, sending Noreena into complete shock as she hurtled free from her control station and tumbled towards her bubble’s forcefields. Disorientation as agonizing as the sensory overload she’d just exited crashed into her senses as ship systems were roughly traded for fragile flesh-and-blood legs and arms.

    The bubble’s field sparked much like Qwaar’s gravitic bubble outside as it strained under the sudden impact of her body. Then it went out completely, sending her tumbling to the catwalk below. She crashed into it with agonizing force, her forehead cracking against the metal surface.

    The dark oblivion of unconsciousness promptly engulfed her.


    Chapter 2

    Noreena’s right eye cracked open the tiniest of slits. Dim red light shone into it. A console suddenly spewed a brilliant shower of sparks, briefly blinding her. She squeezed it shut with a wince.

    As the sparks faded, Noreena opened it again, and glanced about. She lay on the catwalk that was normally positioned directly underneath the control bubble. Its further end had been severed from the door it was attached to, and now lay at the bottom of the spherical chamber that housed the Khar’s control interface with the Godship. Its other end was still connected to the doorway on the opposite side of the control room. Several damaged consoles sparked forlornly, puncturing the darkess with occasional flashes of golden light. Strips of red emergency lighting set into the walls cast a surreal crimson glow around the chamber.

    She closed her eyes as greater awareness returned to her battered body. Pain danced along every nerve and muscle in her body. Even her skin felt like one mass of bubbling agony. Her forehead felt as if someone had smashed it in with a heavy mallet. She tasted blood in her mouth, and could feel more dribbling down her forehead from the blow she’d taken.

    She opened her eyes again when a flashback of Haven’s crust reduced to a massive, squirming Infection crashed into her mind. Then came the sight of of her homeplanet crumpling brilliantly under the antimatter gun’s fire.

    A low moan of pain far deeper than any physical injury’s rose from her. She closed her eyes again, yearning anew for the silent darkness of sleep. The sound of approaching footfalls caused her to open her eyes again. She glimpsed a pair of black Cleanser boots coming towards her..

    “Khar!”

    Kai’s voice, distorted by his helmet’s voice manipulation unit, sounded as if it came from far away.

    Just wanna sleep. That’s all. Just sleep. Wake up a couple hundred years later...it won’t hurt so much then. Sleep. Yes, sleep.

    A pair of hands gently rolled Noreena onto her back, eliciting a fresh gasp as agony exploded along broken bones and torn skin. They then reached underneath her. With a quick motion, the Cleanser hefted her up into his arms. She glanced up at the Cleanser’s helmeted face, and saw a distorted reflection of her bleeding, wounded body on its obsidian visor.

    The sound of more footfalls rapidly approaching pounded into her ears, causing her head to throb painfully in tune with them. She glanced over to the new arrival, and was heartened to spot a familiar Vaygr uniform on his body and a mane of pale gold hair trailing from his head. He looked about as healthy as she felt. His face sported a vicious gash along one cheek, his uniform bore several bloody rips and tears, and his prosthetic arm looked as if it had barely survived a trip through a meat grinder.

    “Mak?” she asked weakly. His battered metal hand rested soothingly on her shoulder.

    “I came as quickly as I could,” the Warlord said softly. “My wreck of a flagship refused to give me up easily to the extraction crews. Qwaar’s had damage of one sort or another for some time. It took us a while to get in here.”

    He leaned in and gently kissed her cheek. He then looked up at Kai, his blue eyes so intense they seemed to glow in the chamber’s dim light.

    “I’ll take her to Medical,” he said, his voice warning that he wouldn’t tolerate any argument – not even from a Cleanser.

    Kai nodded.

    “There are other wounded to tend to as well,” he agreed mildly, then handed Noreena over to the Warlord.

    Makaan reached out and gently collected her from the Cleanser’s arms. He then turned and picked his way across the damaged walkway towards the doorway it was still attached to. He then used his long legs to leverage himself up and then through the door. She slumped into him as the first of many tears welled up in her eyes.

    Haven’s gone, Mak. Everybody I knew down there, except Mom and Dad. Just gone. Gone.

    The Warlord simply hugged her closer to his body as he walked, letting his sympathy and understanding flow into her from his mind.


    Chapter 3

    Noreena stood painfully leaned into her cane, the hand holding it protesting with its own misery. Her dress uniform hugged her various regen patches and sheaths far too closely for her comfort. It reminded her of a corset – the kind reserved for torture.

    Makaan, Chief Tydaar and the two Cleansers stood next to her in a solemn silence. Since her discharge from the Qwaar-Jet’s Sickbay, Noreena had found herself wrapped in a lonely silence she could barely tolerate. Only the Warlord and the Cleansers spoke to her now; everyone else seemed too terrified of her temper after what she did to Haven after Ashoran infected the planet.

    A corner of her mind hoped that her pale, weepy-eyed, withdrawn self seemed harmless enough for them to reconsider that fear. Now she understood how Makaan must have felt towards her after seeing the toll losing his temper with her in the Sickbay conference room had taken on her.

    She peered about the Qwaar-Jet’s Main Hangar. It looked as wounded as she felt. Gashes peppered the walls, while craters pocked the floor. Various robots carted away the cut-down remnants of ceiling girders that had fallen onto the craft and technicians within the massive chamber. Techs moved about somberly, steering clear of the few dried pools of blood that hadn’t been cleaned up after the wounded and dead had been removed from where they had fallen.

    A Somtaaw diplomatic shuttle rumbled over the wreckage as its pilot warily picked his way to the only cleared spot in the Main Hangar: a twelve meter-by-twelve meter square at Noreena’s feet. It turned its starboard side towards her, then settled onto its landing gear with what sounded like a sigh of relief.

    Its ramp promptly extended and settled itself against the Hangar floor. A pair of Somtaaw Marines tromped down, then stood at guard positions on either side of the ramp’s foot.

    Noreena exchanged glances with Tydaar. The Chief, his own nose and eyes puffy with having cried nonstop for the last several hours, quietly nodded with a pained expression. He strode towards the ramp, then climbed up it.

    With the two Cleansers and the Warlord at her side, Noreena slowly picked her way towards the ramp, her entire body protesting the movement as if she had spent six months in a tank before being extracted. Her cane was the only sound in the Hangar besides the occasional clatter of debris being hauled away. Its tip clanged noisily into the floor, the sound echoing about like a surreal funeral dirge.

    Then she reached the ramp’s foot. The two Marines stiffly saluted her. She noticed their eyes glistened with fresh tears and winced at the sheer effort it took them to maintain their otherwise professional demeanor.

    She shifted her weight to fully on both feet, and held her cane out to Kai for a moment. The Cleanser took it without a word, as if sensing what she wanted to do. Ignoring the pain racing up her legs at standing like this, she then reached out one hand to each Marine’s arm.

    “Nobody’s gonna blame you guys,” she said softly, her voice cracking as she spoke, “if you break down. Least of all me. Okay?”

    “Nor will I,” Makaan added quietly. “Such pain is not to be borne alone.”

    They nodded shakily. One Marine swiped at a fresh tear rolling down his face, while the other one sniffled. Noreena gave their arms a fresh squeeze with both hands, then released them.

    She retook her cane from Kai, and painfully worked her way up the shuttle’s ramp. The Warlord and Cleansers strode behind her, then caught up to her once they were inside the shuttle.

    The group shuffled to their seats, then settled in as they sought their restraints. Noreena cringed and grunted through the normally easy task of pulling a four-point harness over her tortured body, but managed to get it buckled on without breaking any safety regulations. The Warlord fared little better; the grimaces that flew across his face told her exactly how much rushing to her side so soon after the battle ended had cost him.

    A quick glance around the passenger compartment showed ship captains from all walks of the Alliance strapped into the other chairs. Noreena spotted a bizarre yet comforting sight: an elfin Kadeshi MBF Captain resting her hand comfortingly on the shoulder of a burly Somtaaw Archangel II Captain who wiped his tears away with the palm of his hand.

    More glances turned up similar things going on throughout the compartment. She felt a grateful mental smile grace her thoughts at such compassion flowing towards the Somtaaw.

    “All right, everyone,” the shuttle pilot’s voice spoke over the loudspeakers with a Republican Taiidani accent. “We’re all set and will be en-route to the Kuun-Lan. Please be aware that there are a lot of repair craft and debris going around right now, so the ride will take a good bit longer than normal.”

    He paused a beat, then continued.

    “For those just coming onboard, I’m filling in for Pilot Veskrin who was killed during the battle. Just in case our new arrivals are wondering why a Taiidani is flying a Somtaaw ship.”

    “Veskrin,” Noreena mused sadly. “He used to fly Workers on rotation with me, Rizzie, and Rey. Happy-go-lucky sort.”

    She let out a huge sigh, feeling as if all her friends and family were falling away from her as every moment ticked past.

    “Guess the War finally caught up with me,” she sighed.

    “Caught up with all of us, I’d say,” Tydaar agreed.
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    WOW!!

    I didn't expect to see part four so soon.

    What a way to start, I hope that super T-mat hasn't come out of that battle unscathed, having just read what damage Qwaar has recieved. I didn't see that phsyic attack coming there, great plot twist there, I hope ashoran has nightmares from that one for a long time to come.
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    Went out with a bang in III, came in with a bang in IV.

    I love the emotional aftermath here - particularly relevant after the Haven incident. You managed to bring across the emotional tragedy and yet keep it sufficiently in check to stop the thing from devolving into some massively overwhelming weep-fest (A crime that would be all too easy to commit in the wake of all that has happened).

    My only complaint is the use of 'she said glumly' in the penultimate line and 'with a fresh sniffle' in the final line. Of course this is a matter of personal preference - but I wonder if it would've been better had you left out those descriptors and allowed the reader the freedom to imagine how Noreena and Tydaar would've said it on their own. I'm sure their conclusions would be similar, given the emotional background you've set up for the rest of the chapter, and it may just give it a better emotional punch in the end because you are not restricting the reader to those descriptors which, frankly, do little justice to the aftermath you've tried to convey here.

    All in all, great start and looking forward to the rest of Part IV
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    Good points there, atmawpn. I changed those last two lines slightly. Thanks.

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    Part four begins already! I seriously have to get caught up; I thought for sure I'd have time to read all the rest before Pt.IV made its debut.

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    Pretty darn sweet! My favorite part is when Norenna is comforting the Marines. That was very touching. Though I am sure once this sadness is gone is going to be replaced with a sheer anger that would rival the Exiles after Kharak. Ash is so going to get his ass handed to him! /evil laughter/ I almost feel sorry for them, almost.
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    YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY! Part IV <3
    Hell, that almost gave me an heart attack to see you had begun it Chromey ^^'
    /me is about to faint

    As Atma said, Part II gone in a blast, Part IV enter in a blast
    Haven's Beast entity screaming remind me how the Naggarok let out a final agonised scream when it was destroyed in the end of Cataclysm But hey, i'm pretty sure that it was intended
    Other than that, i like very much the way you described almost point by point Haven's final demise at the 'hand' of the Antimatter Gun
    The way how emotions are described is also fantastic =)

    To summarize...
    Pure Warrior Awesome <3 (pun with Courage alcoholic drink intended )

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    All of this has happened before...
    All of this will happen again...
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    If I may quote:

    #21- Law of Tactical Unreliability- Tactical geniuses aren’t...

    Ya think that you would infect the planet, AFTER you dealt with the god ship of doom with the antimatter gun, no?

    Obviously Ashoran needs lessons in being a villain.

    I will ask however, how much is left of the Allied fleet after Ashoran shoop da whooped them?

    Question, are the Somtaaw down to their 25000 people again like in cataclysm?

    I'm only asking these many questions because well, you sucked me in....again!
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    I like it...no...actually I love it
    It is quite...inspering.

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    Now would be an excellent time for me to play catch-up.

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    dear worlds Chrome, now both Khar and godship are in battered shape

    I hope Qwarr gets a new wing soon.

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    I think Wings would be more appropriate... that's if I read the description of the aftermath of the destruction of Haven correctly....

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    Very good start, looking forward to the next installment!

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    Nice. Battle, emotion, and bonus points simply for being Legacies. Reading this whilst listening to the Homeworld 2 soundtrack really helps.

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    Yeh...
    Listening this friggin' awesome soundrack always help ^^
    Some of them are just awesome, and some of them are pretty soothing if i may say

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    Has anyone Re-PDFed the first two Parts of Legacies? If so could someone post a link to download them?

    (Sorry about asking here if I should have asked in a discussion forum Chrome....)

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    I believe there are some PDF's floating around. These days I'm getting more and more confused about who's done them. Riess did some once, and hosted them, but those are gone. I believe Khar Makaan has I and II PDF'ed after I made my retcon changes to those two Parts.

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    WOOPWOOPWOOP!!!! This is awesome! Iv read all the legacies these past two weeks and this comes out!


    Damn. What a start. Great contrasting the ultra action followed by everybody in tears.
    There we were, ready to charge the loyalist scum, and then suddenly we were under fire from our west flank. Batshit mental. We turn to return fire, and somehow they sneaked a bunker in, right next to us! We didn't have any meltas so we got the hell out of there. CREEEEED!

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    I believe there are some PDF's floating around. These days I'm getting more and more confused about who's done them. Riess did some once, and hosted them, but those are gone. I believe Khar Makaan has I and II PDF'ed after I made my retcon changes to those two Parts.
    I have
    It's in messages #93 and #95 on Legacies Discussion Thread
    But i might update it pretty soon since i've seen some annoying issues i've had with layout
    Anyway, i'll keep you posted

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    the originals are still up, here i believe,

    http://riess.hwcommunity.com/files/

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    give it afew years and they might be worth something lol.

    They make for a good contrast between 1st and 2nd editions though.

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    I can honestly say that I want to cry after reading that.

    *Sniffle*

    Oh, man, I'm starting to break up....


    Anyway, YAY!, the last and penultimate part is finally out. Get the publishing crews ready, cos this is gonna form up to be one of the best Homeworld fictions in the world.

    Kind of surprising how the Relic Staff hasn't commented yet.
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    Chrome: you seem to have left some References that don't fit any longer in Chapter 41 Legacies part 2, It references Noreena as Makaan's girlfriend, which at that point hadn't happened yet, Just before the elevator goes crazy.... Also chapter 61, during the conversation with Sarei noreena says her relationship started BEFORE the battle, the actual relationship now takes place after the battle.....
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    Looks like I'll have to re-check sometime. I generally do the retcons on the forums, not via the PDFs, so if you're using PDFs there's a chance one was made mid-retcon or from before when I didn't catch those.

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    no, sorry, It was the forum version that sported the errors....

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    Oh okay, probably missed them when doing the last sweep-through. Thanks.

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    you know, for once, the distance scale in a scifi space battle is more or less correct :P

    oh, yes, three round of cheer for Chrome.

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    O_o Talk about starting with a bang! Really excellent balance of both action and poignant scenes, I felt like I was almost there myself!

    I raise a bottle of Courage (Or maybe a Fire Dragon, hmm...) to thee, Chrome, for what will be the start of another great work of fiction!

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    Did somebody ask for more chapters?

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    Chapter 4

    “Looks pretty much like I remember it,” Noreena said glumly.

    She peered about the Kuun-Lan's observation lounge, which had been decorated to suit the somber memorial service the Alliance brass would soon hold for the destroyed Somtaaw homeplanet.

    The last time she had been here was the reception for Karan’s arrival onboard the Kuun-Lan when she came to train Noreena as an Unbound controller. Her memories of the reception and its cheerful conversations with Saeri felt as if they belonged to a completely different person.

    Even the room looked too different to have been the same place. The windows bore signs of hasty replacement work, and the walls sported a fresh coat of pale yellow paint that failed to completely mask the signs of rushed repairs to the bulkheads behind them. The placement of the Somtaaw banners now hanging on the walls seemed too haphazard to be anything other than a thinly veiled effort to hide other unfinished work.

    Noreena picked her way amongst the sea of chairs in the room to the front row, then plopped wearily into the nearest seat. Despite having spent the last three days since Haven’s destruction in Sickbay where they liberally dosed her with sedatives to help her sleep at night, she still felt as if she had been living on two hours’ sleep a day. She cast her gaze to the lounge’s viewports, then felt a fresh stab of inner pain wrench her gut. She bitterly wished Teldri hadn’t pronounced her free to leave her Sickbay this morning; she dreaded the deep pain this memorial service would reawaken.

    Instead of pretty purple nebulae like she had seen that night, a still-cooling debris field hung in the sky, marking where Haven had once orbited its sun. A glowing cloud of superheated dust and debris hung slightly to starboard, marking where Haven had been.

    The battered Alliance fleets surrounded the Kuun-Lan, looking more like wreckage and debris rather than survivors of a horrific battle. Only the movement of resource collectors, Workers, and repair craft around the floating ships told her otherwise.

    Those craft that had managed to jump away before Haven’s final destruction had returned, bringing their resources to bear on their beleaguered fellows. The craft that hadn’t been able to jump out looked so horribly mangled by the debris and destruction that she marveled their even having any survivors to tell the tale. Many hadn’t survived; she could tell them apart from their barely-functioning fellows by the salvagers that picked them apart for useable components.

    Reinforcements had already arrived from the Allied Staging Area, and had begun the monumental task of rebuilding and repairing the damaged fleets. Repair craft of all kinds scurried about tirelessly, chipping away at the tremendous damage the Alliance had incurred during the battle.

    Her gaze picked out the Qwaar-Jet, which looked far worse from the outside than the inside. His powerful hull armor had withstood the barrage of debris and radiation after his gravitic drive’s failure with only a few dents and blackened spots to show for its wild ride. Several of his own Qwaarmetal-hulled repair craft buzzed about, slowly lifting the most damaged plates of Qwaarmetal from the Godship’s hull, then swung freshly manufactured panels into place. Noreena noted that it was a small miracle that Qwaar’s construction plants had taken as little damage as they had; the Alliance would be bemoaning the God of War’s injuries a good deal more if they hadn’t. Other craft slowly moved along the inside of his two surviving wings and his inner hull, repairing the massive swathes of damaged cannons and broken power lines the fighting had left in its wake.

    A shimmering black shilouette, reminiscent of a long angular shard of glass slowly obscured the view. Noreena suddenly recognized it as the Godship’s severed wing. Several dozen frigates and tugs had attached tow lines to the wing, and now carefully dragged it through the debris field to be reattached to the Qwaar-Jet. To her surprise, the wing looked a good deal less battered than she thought it would. No wonder the repair crews believed it could be salvaged.

    She heard soft footfalls approach her. Out the corner of her left eye, she saw Karan approaching her.

    “I still can’t believe,” she said quietly as she turned to the S’jet-Sa as she came to a halt next to her, “that they actually got away from all that.”

    Karan nodded.

    “When the blastwaves finally cleared, nothing Qwaar-deesh remained,” she replied somberly. “The debris out there accounts for about thirty percent of his fleet. The rest, including the super T-MAT and those bioships, are unaccounted for. Chief Intel is assuming that Ashoran’s neural coordination was what allowed the Qwaar-deesh to jump clear so quickly. Given the split-second coordination of their departure from the Garden…it wasn’t much of a surprise.”

    “I see,” Noreena said bitterly, her voice regaining some of the anger she’d felt during her mental battle with Ashoran. “So much for finding that super T-MAT’s debris out there.”

    “There was some,” Karan tiredly replied. “I went through a lot of sensor records in the last couple of days. Judging from what I and Allied Intelligence have been able to piece together, they didn’t get away unscathed. Half the bio-ships took extreme damage, and the super-megaship lost two of its limbs. It also looks like the rest of his fleet took some pretty severe damage.”

    “So we caught a break,” Noreena remarked acidly. “Whoopity-fucking-doo.”

    The observation lounge’s doors opened to reveal Ifriit Somtaaw-Sa hobbling in with his own cane. Senior Captain Alisair walked next to him. Both men bore their deep grief wrapped around them like blankets. Neither one looked as if they had gotten any sleep in the last several days.

    Ifriit looked a great deal older, as if the battle had aged him over two decades in a matter of hours. New lines etched themselves into his features. His normally vibrant green eyes had lost their fire, and now looked like pale ghosts of their former selves. His broad shoulders drooped miserably as he shuffled towards Karan. His skin was far too pale; he looked as if he might faint at any second.

    As he approached the S’jet-Sa, his eyes promply misted over at the sight of the woman he loved; fresh tears rolled down his face. Karan simply walked over, her own eyes growing moist, and enveloped him in a tight, soothing hug. She gently stroked his hair with one hand, while her other arm simply squeezed him for all it was worth. Karan then gently steered him into a nearby front-row seat, then sat down next to him. Alisair settled several seats away to give them some privacy.

    The doors opened again, admitting Makaan and Admiral Threya. The Warlord let out a sad sigh at the sight of the debris field, then strode towards Noreena. He sat next to her, and gently wrapped her in another of his tight hugs. She relaxed into that embrace with a relieved sigh.

    Threya remained at the doorway, taking in the horrific view with a slackening of her regal features, and a widening of her gray eyes. She finally sighed, and walked to one of the chairs near Noreena’s. The Admiral settled into her seat as if she had also aged rapidly during the battle.

    The doors opened periodically, admitting various members of the Alliance brass into the lounge. Within moments, the spacious room became cramped as more and more people took their seats. Very few talked, for the grisly sight outside was a fresh reminder of what the Allies had just endured.

    Threya rose, and crossed to where Noreena, Makaan, Karan, and Ifriit sat. She came to a halt, and eyed the two couples, who turned to regard her with a dull curiosity.

    “Did I ever tell you I had family on Taiidan?” she said quietly. “My clan’s history is rather complicated. Most of my family are – were Republican. They died when Ashoran burned our homeworld in his campaign against the Republic.”

    “I heard about that,” Makaan said somberly, then nodded regally to her. “You have my condolences.”

    She nodded her thanks with a sad sigh.

    “I suppose it’s karmic retribution for what my predecessors did to Kharak,” she said, “for us to to now understand the depth of the Exiles’ loss. And to understand this loss.”

    Her features regained some of their regalness as she gazed steadily at Noreena and Ifriit.

    “Kiith Somtaaw has the full support of my fleet. On behalf of those of my people that I can speak for, I extend our sympathies and condolences for your loss.”

    “T-Thank you, Admiral,” Ifriit said in a choked whisper. “That means much, coming from you.”

    Threya nodded to him, then regarded Karan with a look of determination, as if she had suddenly made up her mind about something. Her posture stiffened as she shifted to a more formal stance.

    “The time has come for something I know has never happened between my people and yours, Lady S’jet,” she said solemnly.

    Karan’s eyebrows quirked on her forehead. A foreboding glitter in her green eyes told Noreena that she suspected where Threya might be heading, but didn’t want to anticipate it for fear that she would be painfully let down.

    Threya paused as she carefully considered her words. Then she returned her steely gaze to Karan.

    “I submit to the public records of the Alliance a formal apology from my fleet, and my division of the Taiidan Empire to the Exiles of Hiigara for the destruction of Kharak by atmospheric-deprivation weapons. There are no excuses, and no reasons for a completely unwarranted attack upon a peaceful people that had no current grievance with the Empire at the time. Not even that three-thousand-year-old treaty was a justification.”

    She sighed bitterly.

    “I wish this were from the Imperial Fleet as a whole,” she said grimly. “Perhaps that day will yet come. For now, I hope this grants some measure of peace to the dead, both past and present.”

    Karan bowed her head with a sniffle of her own as a tear rolled down her cheek.

    She returned her gaze to the Admiral, her eyes glittering with a thousand emotions.

    “I believe it did, Admiral.”

    She let out a deep sigh that seemed to have been held in for over a century, then subtly relaxed in a way Noreena had never seen before.

    “While you may not speak for the entirety of your people, Admiral, I can,” she said in a choked voice. “From the Hiigaran people, from the last Kushan alive, I thank you for an apology I had never dreamed I would get.”

    Threya, wisely eschewing the formal Imperialist salute she would have otherwise given in such an historic moment, bowed deeply to Karan.

    Noreena found her hands meeting one another with a resounding clap before she realized what she was doing. Ifriit and Makaan joined suit, their slow clapping joining Noreena’s. Within moments, the entire audience applauded with solemn approval.

    “And on that high note,” Ifriit said in a stronger voice as he rose to his feet, “let us begin.”


    Chapter 5

    The soaring choral notes of Lament for Kharak faded gracefully into a solemn silence.

    This piece had been composed by a Mothership crewmember after witnessing the Burning of Kharak. Every year, the Hiigarans broadcast or played Lament for Kharak, and its sister piece Hiigara, to memorialize the Burning of Kharak, and the subsequent Landfall on Hiigara.

    No other musical piece would have suited this memorial service for Haven and its people.

    Ifriit Somtaaw-Sa rose from his seat and crossed wincingly to the lectern, the faint thump of his cane against the carpet the only sound after the powerful music.

    “Haven was named thus because it was a sanctuary for our kiith,” Ifriit said quietly. “It was a place to call home, free of outside kiith politics, and safe from pirate attacks. We chose a desert world in homage to Kharak, so that our people would never forget the world the Exiles called home for over three thousand years.”

    He peered across the assembled crowd who sat facing him, a slew of emotions playing across their faces. Each person periodically glanced to the viewports, and the debris field that had once been a thriving world, then returned their gaze to the Somtaaw-Sa.

    “Now it is gone, its memory living on in our hearts and minds. I wish to personally thank the Qwaar-Jet Khar for releasing Haven’s two million, one-hundred thousand, four-hundred and thirty-six people from the eternal suffering of being enslaved to Ashoran’s Beast. In the height of the Beast War, we all knew and chose one thing: death over Infection. In this action, she granted the people of Haven an honorable death, free of whatever sins Ashoran would see fit to carry out through the Beast on the surface.”

    He paused a beat.

    “In this way, they have been delivered into the arms of Sajuuk, Koshiir Ra, and Qwaar-Jet, to rest in the peace they rightly deserve.”

    He paused again, this time to let out a long sigh, and to close his eyes as he gathered his thoughts. He then reopened them.

    “This War just got personal,” he said grimly. “We may have stopped Ashoran from turning our homeworld into a living shipyard for his purposes. But we know that he will choose another planet, and another, until he has what he wants – the entire galaxy in the palm of his hand, with no resistance to his rule.”

    Ifriit’s eyes suddenly blazed anew as he regarded his audience once again.

    “This cannot happen,” he said angrily. “This will not happen!

    He paused again.

    “This Alliance may be wounded, but it is far from defeated.

    Tingles danced up Noreena’s spine at his words as a blaze of fresh fury boiled up inside of her. Her psychic senses told her the Somtaaw-Sa’s entire audience felt exactly the same way.

    “I say this, and I hope Ashoran is listening: We will fight and we will continue fighting until he and his forces are utterly destroyed! In the memory of Haven, of Taiidan, and of all who have fallen at Ashoran’s hands…WE WILL WIN THIS!

    A round of loud applause greeted Ifriit’s final exclamation. Noreena joined it with a huge grin on her face. For a single joyful moment, her grief had parted to reveal the blaze of determination that now burned in her, as it burned in every Allied officer who had heard that speech.

    Ifriit held up his hands.

    “One more thing,” he said as the applause died down. “One more thing.”

    He swept his gaze across the room once again, his green glare turning from fiery to ice-cold in a heartbeat.

    “I, Ifriit Somtaaw-Sa,” he began in an ominous, intense voice, “declare Eternal Vengeance upon Ashoran and his Qwaar-deesh for the destruction of Haven, and the deaths of over two million Somtaaw. Kiith brethren, you may declare Paaura on him as well or abstain from this with no shame, and no regret. I say this because I must say it. I avow this to my last breath if it comes to that – that Ashoran and his armies will die before I do!

    Dead silence swept the room. It was the kind of silence that blazed with such a cold fury that Noreena wondered she didn’t shiver at it.

    Then Alisair rose.

    “I Alisair Kenaull Somtaaw,” he began in an equally steely voice, “declare Eternal Vengeance upon Ashoran and his Qwaar-deesh for the destruction of Haven, and all the death and destruction they have wrought.”

    Noreena wincingly rose to her feet, then swept the room.

    “I, Qwaar-Jet Khar, Noreena Delai Somtaaw,” she said quietly, her voice feeling cold and harsh to her ears, “declare Eternal Vengeance upon Ashoran and the Qwaar-deesh. They’ve been beating on us from day one. It’s time to take the War to them, where it belongs! I will survive this War. Ashoran will not!

    Makaan rose from his seat, and swept the room with his intense blue gaze.

    “We Vaygr have a similar custom,” he said, his voice as cold as it had been during the Vaygr War. “I, Makaan Vayuur, solemnly swear a Blood Oath that Ashoran will indeed die by my hand.”

    Several Vaygr rose and repeated the Blood Oath, using the exact same words Makaan had. They saluted him, then remained standing.

    Admiral Anira Elson rose, straightening her uniform.

    “Taiidani customs also have a vengeance oath. I swore mine after seeing my homeworld burned,” she said bitterly as she drew a small dagger from her side, then slowly ran it across her left hand.

    “I wish to renew it. By the Taiid, by the Silver Moons, and before the Eyes of Koshiir Ra, I swear that Ashoran and his allies shall die before I draw my last breath in this life.”

    She held up her hand, which bore a long, nasty cut from the dagger’s blade. Blood trickled slowly from the wound, then dripped to the floor. She clenched the bleeding hand into a fist, and shook it once, then let it drop.

    “And so I renew my Oath,” she said quietly. “Who else?”

    Noreena glanced to Threya, only to see her already standing with an identical cut in her hand from an equally identical dagger.

    “By the Taiid, by the Silver Moons, before the Eyes of Koshiir Ra,” she said in an utterly cold voice, “I too swear that Ashoran and his allies shall die before I draw my last breath in this life.”

    The two women shared a look that exchanged a thousand words.

    “We’re more alike than I wanted to admit,” Elson remarked with a crooked grin. “Perhaps we should see about establishing a union between our separate forces.”

    “I would be honored, Admiral Elson,” Threya replied as she bowed to her Republican counterpart. Elson returned the bow.

    “Then,” Ifriit said, “unless there are”—

    Karan stood, promptly cutting Ifriit off, much to the surprise of the entire room.

    “I have long eschewed vengeance in favor of more reasonable lines of thought,” she began. “In this time of pain and retribution, one must close these things with a note of the positive, with an eye towards what we must do next.”

    She paused a beat.

    “The Sajuuk has been destroyed. The Qwaar-Jet has taken damage that would have destroyed any other ship outright. Two Gods are not enough to stop the nightmare that has been unleashed upon this galaxy. I have been informed by my Chief of Intelligence that the super-megaship has been named Qaal-Haara, the Ender of Days, the Destroyer of All. No other name fits. All other Allied departments have agreed upon the name as well.”

    She sighed and closed her eyes, just as Ifriit had before regaining his fire. She reopened them, and swept the room with her calm gaze.

    “As such, the Ender of Days will require the Divine Trinity – Sajuuk, Qwaar-Jet, and Koshiir Ra – to defeat it. We must also rebuild the Sajuuk to its former glory, and perhaps to an even greater glory. The Qwaar-Jet must be repaired.”

    She paused to consider her words, then continued.

    “We must find the Koshiir Ra. Then we must put into effect the great plan to destroy Ashoran, the plan that was laid out for us countless eons ago, to undertake in the Third Great War. The Fourth Record, held by the Star-Metal Scrolls once protected by Kiith Somtaaw, is this plan.

    “We must find the Fourth Record and Koshiir Ra, so that we can end this War with an unquestioned Allied victory.”

    She paused.

    “The time has come to reunite the Great Trinity and defeat the Darkness…once and for all.”


    Chapter 6

    Noreena pecked her way across her quarters’ lobby. Her entranceway lay ahead. All she wanted now was a nice warm cup of tea, her pajamas, and her bed. While she doubted she would sleep much, the feeling of being enveloped in blankets would more than make up for her inevitable insomnia. This would be her first night outside of Sickbay since Haven; she reached into her uniform pocket and felt for the bottle of high-octane sleep-aid pills resting there.

    She slowed as she reached the doorway. She reached with the cane to hit the door-open control.

    YOU MAY PUNISH ME AS YOU SEE FIT, KHAR. IF YOU WISH TO LEAVE ME, I SHALL ACCEPT MY FATE. I FAILED YOU, AND THE ALLIANCE. HAVEN WAS DESTROYED BECAUSE I FAILED TO STOP…HIM.

    Noreena blinked, then eyed the walls around her.

    “C’mon Qwaar. Don’t be an idiot. The only way you’d have failed us is if you couldn’t blow up the thing Ash made Haven into.”

    DAMAGE IS NOTHING, KHAR. IT CAN BE REPAIRED. FAILURE OF THIS DEGREE….CANNOT.

    She sighed.

    I shouldn’t be this surprised. Qwaar’s probably the most advanced AI we’ve ever run into. Of course he’d take an emotional hit from the battle like we all did. He’s a War God and everything. Defeat in a battle WOULD bug him. Especially given his history with Ash.

    “That’s something we’re all dealing with,” she sighed. “I wish I’d pointed the main gun at the megaship before it fired, but did that occur to me? Nope, cause we were all getting hit by grav-shots. We were just trying to survive. We had no idea what Ash was gonna do to Haven.”

    She eyed the nearest wall camera in her best attempt at full-on eye contact.

    “Hindsight’s always perfect,” she added bitterly. “If you failed…then we all did.”

    I WILL NOT ACCEPT THAT, KHAR!

    She glared at the camera.

    “Qwaar, if you’re not gonna accept that we failed, then you don’t get to accept that you failed! If you’re so eager for punishment, use that!”

    Tense moments crawled past.

    I SEE, KHAR,” the Godship rumbled. “VERY WELL, THEN.

    He paused a beat.

    GET YOUR LAZY CREWS TO SPEED UP THOSE INFERNAL REPAIRS AND I WILL CALL IT A DEAL.

    “Clearing the debris that grav-drive left in your engine block is gonna take weeks. You can’t rush that!”

    JUST WATCH ME, KHAR. I DO NOT HAVE ARMIES OF ROBOTS FOR NO GOOD REASON.

    Noreena could only sputter in exasperation.

    I WILL NOT BE STRANDED FOR AN ETERNITY LIKE THE NAGGAROK!

    “Qwaar, it’s only for a month or two at the worst.”

    I……DON’T……CARE!

    The deck quivered violently under her feet, indicating exactly the depth of Qwaar’s frustration at his damaged state. She groaned as she slapped a hand to her face.

    Shit. I liked him better when he was moping. Now he’s just gonna super-PMS on everybody! Great. Just great. Instead of Bitchy Nika, now I gotta deal with Bitchy Qwaar!

    The doors to her living room slid open, revealing Makaan standing before her, his uniform jacket opened to reveal a close-fitting tanktop which showed just enough of his chest to hint at the lurid scars he sported from his wounds at Hethlim.

    “I heard you two arguing outside,” he remarked to Noreena as he quirked an eyebrow. “I thought I’d better back you up in case he became even more unreasonable.”

    She could only blink in surprise.

    “W-what are you doing here?”

    The Warlord’s regal features softened slightly.

    “Remember when I said that if we survived this, I wouldn’t spend so much time away from you?”

    She nodded in dazed relief.

    “It doesn’t take a genius to note that you’re going to have a lot of trouble sleeping for a while,” the Warlord explained. “You might as well have some company. Being alone right now…is not a good way to be.”

    “No, it’s not,” Noreena sighed.

    Her gut clenched yet again as memories of watching Haven crumple under the Qwaar-Jet’s main gun replayed in her head with agonizing slowness. She shook her head to clear it, then returned her gaze to the Warlord. A small smile flitted across her tired features.

    “Thanks, Mak,” she said softly. “I’m gonna need every bit of help I can get.”

    Smiling tenderly down at her, he gently pulled her into a soothing embrace.
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    Wow. I hadn't anticipated the use of Plot Thickener this soon into Part IV. Then again, I guess there's plenty of road to be covered, what with the Star Metal Scrolls and Koshiir Ra and all.

    The analysis (or reflection if you would prefer the term) of defeat is good. I rather like how you've made the transition through the so-called "stages of grief" rather realistic and close to what one might have expected in real life. Of course, something tells me Qwaar still has a ways to go, being still somewhat stuck in the "Anger" phase. Still, it's a good way of portraying the reaction of someone who would have tasted defeat or some variant of grief for the first time.

    I'm looking forward to future releases - not just of chapters, but of "official" art on the final approaches you've decided on with respect to Koshiir Ra. And as always, quality over quantity: take your time with the stuff

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    What...
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    ...Hell...? oO

    /me is speechless
    Chrome, you really deserve that 'Made of Awesome' title ^^ There are no words to describe how good all of this is
    Though i knew/predicted that all would swear some kind of Pauura/Blood Oath, the way you described it gave me the goosebumps with the beauty of it
    Even better, the moment when Admiral Threya makes a formal Apology on behalf of the Imperial Fleet for the Burning of Kharak... This is priceless... Truly pricelkess =)

    Other than that, i'v got only one thing to say...
    Keep it up Chrome... Make us crave for more and then give us joy with other chapters
    (Note: The 'crave' part should indicate that i have no wish to hurry you )

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    destroyed then rebuilt the Sajuuk... brilliant

    perhaps some nifty upgrade?

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    @Garnet: See what i've written in my last message in Legacies Discussion Thread and indulge yourself ^^

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    Isn't Karan the greatest biologist in the homeworld universe ? She wasn't involved in the cataclysm war, but she did get dragged into this one. I wonder if she could come up with some good counters against bioships ? like something that disrupt Ash's control over them ?

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    Nice. Really nice. I wasn't expecting Paaura, but when it was called I immediately knew that it was logical and inevitable. Fantastic.

    Does Qwaar share his voice with the Keeper? That growling, evil thunder from the Keeper in 'The Guardian' track just fits perfectly to the God o' War.

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    Well, what about cracking the armour of the super Tmat and feed it with ADW^^

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    Karan is (unfortunately) not a biologist...
    She is neuroscientist, that's not the same

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    Correct. She's a neuronics expert in the HW1 manual, specializing in making machines emulate organic nerve structures. This tends to overlap into neurology and neuroscience, which is how she came up with the neural-interface system that let her control the Mothership. The manual clearly states that she did not want this system used on anyone else, so offered herself up as the test subject...and became Fleet Command. So in a way she's probably a combo neuroscientist/AI specialist.

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    Does Ashoran realize what someone who has declared Paaura will do to fufill that Vow? Let's see, for example: (Digs up his battered copy of the Cata Manual) Iifrit Tambuur'sa case; left as the only survivor of his kith, loses his wife after the Taidan attack on the cyro racks, Declares Paaura on the imperalist Taidan and gets a frigate to work with, becomes famous bounty hunter, collects the heads of 300 taidan war criminals!!!

    Paaura is NOT to be taken lightly! And now the Qwaar-Jet Khar is after him after making that vow!!

    (PS. I've read my manual so much it's held together with duct tape!)

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    Fiction

    Oh, do any of you think she could have an understanding of neuroscience, especially on the molecular level, without some understanding of biology ? On a very technical level, neuroscience is a discipline of biology, but I will not press the point. Perhaps she's not that good with biology outsider her specification (she probably does not remember metabolism very well, LOL.) Nobody is.

    Regardless, she would figure out the command and control system of those bioships given sufficient data.

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    And I think it's important to note that taking a head in naval combat is quite a feat.

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    I would think Karan would understand neuro-systems, be they organic, or digital replications. I'd imagine that if someone gave her a good load of the Beast's scientific files, she could make good sense of them. Remember, she's had about 100 years to refine her mind and her knowledge since Kharak.

    Whether or not that actually helps is another question, though.

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    Indeed, this will be intresting.

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    Did one small retcon, and added a musical piece of sorts to the formal memorial service to Haven. Look at the very top of Chapter 5. I had intended to do this with the memorial, but for some stupid, inane reason beyond my ability to understand, I completely forgot to write it in.

    I believe this little adjustment will add a little more poignance to the memorial.

    And before you ask, Lament for Kharak and Hiigara are indeed Agnus Dei. It would've made absolutely no sense to title it Agnus Dei in the Homeworldverse as they don't use Latin. But given what the music stood for in the game, I believe those two titles suit it best.

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    Ah... my favourite piece of classical music of all time...

    So, is one the strings version and the other the choral version? I wonder what Yes's Homeworld would be!

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    Excellant Chrome. This whole legacies series is something i just cant tear myself away from.


    Great work, your giving me a boatload of help with my own writing.

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    Yes is another piece I'm going to work into the story. You don't get to know where it's coming, or when. But you'll like it.

    I used the choral version in the story, since that's what played at the Burning in M03 on Homeworld.

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    Need to get more time to read those. Things just won't stop chasing me lately.

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